Reviewing First Shoot (Changing Narrative)

1st Attempt- Footage from Tom Cornock on Vimeo.

Having looked back on the footage we have noticed some fundamental issues.

• Firstly, the narrative lacks a structure and is not very engaging. The character does very little and we feel this brings the quality of the footage down. To achieve a grade we would like, we need to improve the narrative and show more of a story 
• The lighting is very drab and dull. We initially wanted this, however, with the studio footage (which is likely to be a lot brighter, the contrast may be dramatically different and not fit well together.
• Variety of shots. Many of our shots have been taken from the same angle and our actor is positioned centrally which is not aesthetically pleasing for viewers. In addition, we use too many mid shots which are very repetitive and this affects the outcome of the video.
• Shaky Footage. We definitely need to use a tripod more on our second shot. Some of our shots could have looked very clean cut, inside they look poorly positioned as there is a constant wobble. Next shoot we will consider this and not rush the shots.

Plan of action-

We have since created a narrative with more substance and interest. We have decided to base the narrative using more inspiration from the lyrics. For example, the new narrative will start with the character stealing an item. In the song, there is a constant reference to 'Karma' and a 'fall from grace' which we would like to include in our video. We would need another actor to play a character who will confront the protagonist. We feel that this would give the video a much clear equilibrium and disruption to engage our viewers. Furthermore, we will use a wider variety of shots  (at the same location) to improve the quality of the video (using the appropriate equipment e.g. tripod).

Brief Notes on newer Narrative-